The fast ferocious waves hit the beach
while the beach was covered in heat
The little children were running around like mice
A popsicle would have been nice
While trying to keep cool
The beach was like a public pool
The sizzling on the sun burnt
While the plop of the water cooled burns
With people that were hungry were in a line
A line to get food that extended to about the moon
Slant Rhyme
Onomatopeia
Hyperbole
I like how you rhymed in every other line. I was also written very well.
ReplyDeleteI like how you wrote about the ocean.
ReplyDeleteAmazing poem, like your uses of poetry terms.
ReplyDeleteVery nice poem Dom I like how it flows smoothly.
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